Sunday 30 August 2020

Alliteration poem - interesting things

Alliteration Poem 



Interesting things




Gleeful gymnastics with gorgeous gymnasts, gracefully gliding across the floor 

Gigantic gooey toasted sandwiches go great with green ghost drool 

Girls glued golden grass to a grumpy goat with gross ghoul blood

Grape juice gets grilled with a giggling granny potion

Gru orders golden glop from Germany

Grucilla gibbler, gabbles greatly about a glowing globe 

Gossiping Grinch’s garden glitches green with granny smith apples

 

Monday 24 August 2020

A narrative about losing a winning lotto ticket - Ellie and the lotto ticket

 Title: Ellie and the lotto ticket 


Introduction


“Hmm I wonder what we should have for dinner tonight,” Ellie asked herself before she disappeared to the grocery store.’ I’ll just decide when I get there, It can be a surprise dinner for the family ’. Ellie cheerfully skipped over to the village center ready to plan her exciting dinner. 


“Ooo I better check my lotto ticket,” Ellie said suddenly remembering that tonight was the big one million. That is a big amount considering they were a third world country. BEEP! Ellie scans the ticket. Will she win?...





Paragraph 1 - she wins


“YASSSSSSSSSSS,” Ellie howled, as she launched in the air. Ellie danced around the people having a party of her own. she had won. The shocked and excited look on Ellie’s face showed how amazed she was. A crowd started to loom over her like trees in a forest. Ellie stared vigorously at the ticket ignoring the people around her. The villagers murmured about her, to each other, but Ellie didn’t care. The whole world around her stopped for a minute and at that moment she thought about how grateful she was. Instead of going back to shopping she dashed home, she desperately needed to tell her family. She weaved between people, slid between houses and ran through the dirt fields and through the twisted forest.






Paragraph - 2 kidnapped


Ellie was almost home, she just had to get through the twisted forest. She rushed, trying to get there as fast as she could. Then suddenly darkness. Ellie awoke in a stone lair her head aching. It was very old and had many different potions splattered all over the place. Where was she? How was she going to get out? Ellie was so scared and sore, she hadn’t realized that her hands were tied to a pole. She was shivering in fear and cold. 

“Hello Ellie, ” said a witch appearing from behind the door. Ellie didn’t reply and just stared. The witch was old, her skin wrinkled and grey looking. Her long purple fingernails, sharp as scissors, her hair was broken bristles of a paint brush, her fiendish eyes flames danced inside and her nose long and crooked. In the witches hand, hidden behind her, Ellie spotted her lotto ticket. 

“ That's mine,” she said pointing at the ticket.

“ Yes your right, but I’m going to use it to get the strongest potions, make a dangerous concoction and take over the world haha”  cackled the witch. 

“ You can’t do that,” announced Ellie, trying to move but couldn’t get out of the strong rope knotted behind her.

“ Well you can’t stop me now,” she whispered, crawling up to Ellie's face like a spider. Was Ellie ever going to get out?



Paragraph 3 - capturing the witch 


The witch had left the room, hiding the ticket away. Ellie needed to untie her hands but how. Then something caught Ellie's eye. Matches! But they were quite far away on top of the table. So using her long dangly legs, she stretched as far as she could, only just knocking them off and sliding them in with her feet. She carefully lit one match and bent herself  in half. holding the match in her feet, she put the flame near her hands where the rope was tied in a knot. Sssss! The rope was burning slowly until. SNAP!  Yes Ellie was free but she still had to find that lotto ticket. She snuck into the witches room while the witch was in the bathroom taking a cold shower. Ellie looked through every draw twice, until she bumped into something but it wasn’t visible. She found the handle and pulled it out. Hesitantly  she put her hand in. the only thing in there was her lotto ticket, she pulled it out. The witch came into the room singing her towel balancing on her head. She didn’t see Ellie since she had run out of the room and hid. She made the secret draw visible and screamed. Where was it thought the evil witch? While the witch was looking, Ellie had drawn a fake lotto ticket. She tied it to a rope on the floor and the rope connected to a cage. Ellie hid and waited for the witch to come to look out here. The witch came out. She looked and saw the fake lotto ticket. “Yesssss” she wailed. Then she stopped, where Ellie was. Well she looks like she's gone and left this here so hahaha thought the witch. She grabbed and then CRASH! She was trapped by Ellie. Ellie came out of her hiding spot and waved the real lotto ticket in the witch's face then Ellie ran.




Conclusion 


Ellie sprinted out of the witch’s lair and kept running until she could no longer hear the wailing screams of the witch. Then she stopped pulling out her compass. She used the compass, the compass had her whole town on it and always pointed her in the direction of the village in case she got lost. She finally found her way home. As soon as she opened the door she was enveloped in hugs by her kids and her husband. 

“ Where have you been, two days have passed since we’ve seen you? We were worried sick” said her husband with a sigh of relief. 

“Well” said Ellie then she continued with the rest of her terrific story, which only her kids believed. When Ellie had finished the story her husband was so happy as he had just found out they had won lotto. They celebrated by having a fancy dinner together and  dancing all night. It was spectacular. The family bought a nice home in Paris and also gave some money to the charities back where they used to live in Ethiopia. The family became very wealthy from then on. Both Ellie and her husband had good paying jobs. Ellie always thought about the day she won the lotto, then she imagined what life would’ve been like if they hadn’t.  Now Ellie knows never ever go near the twisted forest again. 




Have I:

Yes/No

  • Written an introduction with an interesting hook?

yes

  • Described the setting and characters?

Yes - some

  • Included a variety of details like thoughts, feelings and the five senses?

yes

  • Used a variety of words to link events?

yes

  • Written a resolution with an impactful closing?

Kind of 

  • Used paragraphs

yes

  • Used interesting and powerful vocabulary?

yes

  • Corrected most spelling, punctuation and grammar?

Some of it

Two things I did well were… 

Using similes, personification and metaphors

Describing 

Something I can improve is… 

Not stretching the paragraphs out to much, it’s too long


Making my endings more interesting


Tuesday 4 August 2020

Inquiry- the history of money

The History of Money

9000 BC: money was animals like cattle, sheep and camels. grain and vegetables became very important and so did beads or sharks' teeth or animal skins.

1200 BC: The pacific, Indian oceans, china and parts of Africa used cowrie shells.

1000 BC:china was the first country to discover and use metal money, china also made imitations of cowrie using copper and bronze. They also used “tool” money like knives, spades and hoes. The metal tool money soon develop into disc which were the first coin.

500 BC: Lydia made coins out of silver and gold, and stamped the back of it so everyone would know it wasn’t fake. The coins were all different shapes. The use of the precious metal showed it had value

806 AD: due to copper shortages, china developed paper money. Paper money was on and off for 5 centuries but after stopped when inflation went uncontrollable.